Glowurm Posted July 6, 2008 Report Share Posted July 6, 2008 Slipping downward, spiralling out of control I've lost track of my senses. I feel almost nothing I hear no sounds and I see only black From the depths of my mind I cry out for help I shake and I scream, but there's no response I'm alone in this world, sliding down to die I begin to move faster towards the end goal I know my journey's fleeting, I feel it in my heart There's nothing left for me, my emotions flow out I'm sliding, rushing, spinning, and never stopping The depth of my agony seems to stretch on forever I wish it would finish, and yet there's still more But then there's a light slicing into my brain And as I slip faster, I hear some kids shouting I can feel water splashing against my skin I can smell chlorine like in a large pool I start to scream, I don't know what this means And then I burst free. Water slides are so much fun. -- It's not poetry. There's no correlation between the lines at all besides the theme, and even that changes. There's no logical, or even illogical, setting out that it follows. It's a bunch of words mashed together. That's what I think. So. What about your thoughts? - Glowurm Seriously though, water slides are awesome. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Horatio Posted July 6, 2008 Report Share Posted July 6, 2008 Very cool!!!!!! I think your writing is awesome!!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Music_is_Life Posted July 8, 2008 Report Share Posted July 8, 2008 That was kind of fun to read. Very nice. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SleepoverFanatic52 Posted July 16, 2008 Report Share Posted July 16, 2008 Aw Glowurm, I loved that! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Topazia Posted August 11, 2008 Report Share Posted August 11, 2008 nice! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Glowurm Posted August 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 13, 2008 Thanks all. Huhuhu. c: Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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