Mega Wolf Posted July 29, 2004 Report Share Posted July 29, 2004 I slowly open my eyes to a bright warm room. The green curtains shone beautifully in the sunlight. My clock read 7:30 in red. My desk was messy with papers and magazines. Floor covered in dirty clothes from the previous day. I rubbed off that stuff you find on your eyes in the morning. I examined it. It was dry and sandlike. I stared at it. Then I sluggishly wiped it on my comforter. I got up from my bed and I went down the stairs tp breakfeast at 7:35. Extensions to come... This topic shows how important it is to zoom in on a moment. How much longer, and more interesting a story can be if you zoom in on the moment... You'll see what I mean in the next post. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cow Posted July 30, 2004 Author Report Share Posted July 30, 2004 Humm...intresting. o_O Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mega Wolf Posted July 30, 2004 Report Share Posted July 30, 2004 I slowly open my eyes to a bright warm room. The green curtains shone beautifully in the sunlight. My clock read 7:30 in red. My desk was messy with papers and magazines. Floor covered in dirty clothes from the previous day. The clothes, they looked perfectly clean, but yet, they weren't. The brown blouse and black skirt looked perfectly clean, but the truth was I had tripped and fell onto the ground. I rubbed off that stuff you find on your eyes in the morning. I examined it. It was dry and sandlike. I stared at it. Then I sluggishly wiped it on my comforter. I got up from my bed carefully taking off the bed covers. Right after I went down the stairs quietly to breakfeast at 7:35. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Horatio Posted August 2, 2004 Report Share Posted August 2, 2004 Interesting! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mega Wolf Posted August 3, 2004 Report Share Posted August 3, 2004 :laughing well, it's definitely different! now to extend it further! (this is entirely my odd imagination) I slowly open my eyes to a bright warm room. The green curtains shone beautifully in the sunlight. the walls were a softer green. My clock read 7:30 in blood red. My desk was messy with papers and magazines. Floor covered in dirty clothes from the previous day. The clothes, they looked perfectly clean, but yet, they weren't. The brown blouse and black skirt looked perfectly clean, but the truth was I had tripped and fell on to the ground. I rubbed off that stuff you find on your eyes in the morning. I examined it. It was dry and sandlike. I stared at it. Then I sluggishly wiped it on my comforter. I got up from my bed carefully taking off the bed covers. Right after I went down the stairs quietly. Along the way, I tripped over my black dog, Miles. He yelped. I was at breakfeast at 7:35. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Arkcher Posted November 30, 2008 Report Share Posted November 30, 2008 Veeerrry interesting. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Glowurm Posted November 30, 2008 Report Share Posted November 30, 2008 WHAT IS THIS WHAT WHY ARKCHER HAVE YOU BECOME AN OCCULT PAGAN HERETIC NECROMANCER THING SERIOUSLY WHAT IS WITH ALL THESE OLD TOPICS EVEN BETTER QUESTION IS WHY DO I CARE WHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHAT by the way, note to mw from 2004: use obscure descriptions, they make everything more fun be all like THE BLOUSE WAS A SHADE OF BROWN SIMILAR TO THAT OF A LIGHT MUD CAKED ON BLUE JEANS, FADED FROM BEING OUT IN THE SUN TOO LONG. ITS TEXTURE WAS THAT OF A blablabla see how awesome it makes it? also never say stuff in formal literature seriously i mean even if this is informal and even if you're doing something formal but writing from a character's point of view and the character would be one to use stuff and stuff don't use stuff anyway try to avoid it as much as you can I HOPE YOUR 2004 SELF CAN BENEFIT FROM THIS INVALUABLE ADVICE oh wait i'm failing english you probably don't want to listen to me. ahahahaha i should probably listen to me first why do i never take my own advice, seriously i should do obscure descriptions like that more often Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
- Kat - Posted November 30, 2008 Report Share Posted November 30, 2008 Lulz, I saw this topic while I was digging through old topics a few days ago because I was just that bored. But I didn't read it because of some reason that I forget now. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Horatio Posted November 30, 2008 Report Share Posted November 30, 2008 Lulz, I saw this topic while I was digging through old topics a few days ago because I was just that bored. But I didn't read it because of some reason that I forget now. You're here now. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
- Kat - Posted December 1, 2008 Report Share Posted December 1, 2008 Lulz, I saw this topic while I was digging through old topics a few days ago because I was just that bored. But I didn't read it because of some reason that I forget now. You're here now. trufax u___u Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Horatio Posted December 1, 2008 Report Share Posted December 1, 2008 Lulz, I saw this topic while I was digging through old topics a few days ago because I was just that bored. But I didn't read it because of some reason that I forget now. You're here now. trufax u___u *throws - Kat - in the pool with watermelons* Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
- Kat - Posted December 1, 2008 Report Share Posted December 1, 2008 *organizes the watermelons into a deadly army* Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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