Taynio Posted November 8, 2004 Report Share Posted November 8, 2004 Jenny was so happy about the house they had found. For once in her life 'twas on the right side of town. She unpacked her things with such great ease. As she watched her new curtains blow in the breeze. How wonderful it was to have her own room. School would be starting; she'd have friends over soon. There'd be sleep-overs, and parties; she was so happy It's just the way she wanted her life to be. On the first day of school, everything went great. She made new friends and even got a date! She thought, "I want to be popular and I'm going to be, Because I just got a date with the star of the team!" To be known in this school you had to have clout, And dating this guy would sure help her out. There was only one problem stopping her fate. Her parents had said she was too young to date. "Well I just won't tell them the entire truth. They won't know the difference; what's there to lose?" Jenny asked to stay with her friends that night. Her parents frowned but said, "All right." Excited, she got ready for the big event But as she rushed around like she had no sense, She began to feel guilty about all the lies, But what's a pizza, a party, and a moonlight ride? Well the pizza was good, and the party was great, But the moonlight ride would have to wait. For Dan was half drunk by this time. But he kissed her and said that he was just fine. Then the room filled with smoked and Dan took a puff. Jenny couldn't believe he was smoking that stuff. Now Dan was ready to ride to the point But only after he'd smoked another joint. They jumped in the car for the moonlight ride, Not thinking that he was too drunk to drive. They finally made it to the point at last, And Dan started trying to make a pass. A pass is not what Jenny wanted at all (and by a pass, I don't mean playing football.) "Perhaps my parents were right....maybe I am too young. Boy, how could I ever, ever be so dumb." With all of her might, she pushed Dan away: "Please take me home, I don't want to stay." Dan cranked up the engine and floored the gas. In a matter of seconds they were going too fast. As Dan drove on in a fit of wild anger, Jenny knew that her life was in danger. She begged and pleaded for him to slow down, But he just got faster as they neared the town. "Just let me get home! I'll confess that I lied. I really went out for a moonlight ride." Then all of a sudden, she saw a big flash. "Oh God, Please help us! We're going to crash!" She doesn't remember the force of impact. Just that everything all of a sudden went black. She felt someone remove her from the twisted rubble, And heard, "call an ambulance! These kids are in trouble! Voices she heard...a few words at best. But she knew there were two cars involved in the wreck. Then wondered to herself if Dan was all right, And if the people in the other car was alive. She awoke in the hospital to faces so sad. "You've been in a wreck and it looks pretty bad." These voices echoed inside her head, As they gently told her that Dan was dead. They said "Jenny, we've done all we can do. But it looks as if we'll lose you too." "But the people in the other car!?" Jenny cried. "We're sorry, Jenny, they also died." Jenny prayed, "God, forgive me for what I've done I only wanted to have just one night of fun." "Tell those people's family, I've made their lives dim, And wish I could return their families to them." "Tell Mom and Dad I'm sorry I lied, And that it's my fault so many have died. Oh, nurse, won't you please tell them that for me?" The nurse just stood there-she never agreed. But took Jenny's hand with tears in her eyes. And a few moments later Jenny died. A man asked the nurse, "Why didn't you do your best To bid that girl her one last request?" She looked at the man with eyes so sad. "Because the people in the other car were her mom and dad." Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Taynio Posted November 13, 2004 Author Report Share Posted November 13, 2004 Wow...............no replies.............. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Horatio Posted November 13, 2004 Report Share Posted November 13, 2004 Wow...............no replies.............. That is because this is such an emotional story. It is very hard to comment. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cheesus Posted November 13, 2004 Report Share Posted November 13, 2004 It leaves me speechless.. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mega Wolf Posted November 14, 2004 Report Share Posted November 14, 2004 I just read that and my mouth went so dry. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Taynio Posted November 15, 2004 Author Report Share Posted November 15, 2004 I just read that and my mouth went so dry. <{POST_SNAPBACK}> That good huh? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Horatio Posted November 16, 2004 Report Share Posted November 16, 2004 That good huh? That good! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mega Wolf Posted November 16, 2004 Report Share Posted November 16, 2004 That good huh? <{POST_SNAPBACK}> Yeah it is. There's a lot of good dialogue and description in there. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Taynio Posted November 17, 2004 Author Report Share Posted November 17, 2004 Yeah it is. There's a lot of good dialogue and description in there. <{POST_SNAPBACK}> heh, ty Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dark hamster Posted November 18, 2004 Report Share Posted November 18, 2004 wow... that's awesome Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Biggest Fan Of Fuzzy Posted November 21, 2004 Report Share Posted November 21, 2004 You wrote that? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Taynio Posted November 24, 2004 Author Report Share Posted November 24, 2004 You wrote that? <{POST_SNAPBACK}> wouldn't you like to know? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Topazia Posted November 24, 2004 Report Share Posted November 24, 2004 oh man. oh wow. that was so sad. man. that poor girl...[/sizer] Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Honey Posted November 24, 2004 Report Share Posted November 24, 2004 Jenny was so happy about the house they had found. For once in her life 'twas on the right side of town. She unpacked her things with such great ease. As she watched her new curtains blow in the breeze. How wonderful it was to have her own room. School would be starting; she'd have friends over soon. There'd be sleep-overs, and parties; she was so happy It's just the way she wanted her life to be. On the first day of school, everything went great. She made new friends and even got a date! She thought, "I want to be popular and I'm going to be, Because I just got a date with the star of the team!" To be known in this school you had to have clout, And dating this guy would sure help her out. There was only one problem stopping her fate. Her parents had said she was too young to date. "Well I just won't tell them the entire truth. They won't know the difference; what's there to lose?" Jenny asked to stay with her friends that night. Her parents frowned but said, "All right." Excited, she got ready for the big event But as she rushed around like she had no sense, She began to feel guilty about all the lies, But what's a pizza, a party, and a moonlight ride? Well the pizza was good, and the party was great, But the moonlight ride would have to wait. For Dan was half drunk by this time. But he kissed her and said that he was just fine. Then the room filled with smoked and Dan took a puff. Jenny couldn't believe he was smoking that stuff. Now Dan was ready to ride to the point But only after he'd smoked another joint. They jumped in the car for the moonlight ride, Not thinking that he was too drunk to drive. They finally made it to the point at last, And Dan started trying to make a pass. A pass is not what Jenny wanted at all (and by a pass, I don't mean playing football.) "Perhaps my parents were right....maybe I am too young. Boy, how could I ever, ever be so dumb." With all of her might, she pushed Dan away: "Please take me home, I don't want to stay." Dan cranked up the engine and floored the gas. In a matter of seconds they were going too fast. As Dan drove on in a fit of wild anger, Jenny knew that her life was in danger. She begged and pleaded for him to slow down, But he just got faster as they neared the town. "Just let me get home! I'll confess that I lied. I really went out for a moonlight ride." Then all of a sudden, she saw a big flash. "Oh God, Please help us! We're going to crash!" She doesn't remember the force of impact. Just that everything all of a sudden went black. She felt someone remove her from the twisted rubble, And heard, "call an ambulance! These kids are in trouble! Voices she heard...a few words at best. But she knew there were two cars involved in the wreck. Then wondered to herself if Dan was all right, And if the people in the other car was alive. She awoke in the hospital to faces so sad. "You've been in a wreck and it looks pretty bad." These voices echoed inside her head, As they gently told her that Dan was dead. They said "Jenny, we've done all we can do. But it looks as if we'll lose you too." "But the people in the other car!?" Jenny cried. "We're sorry, Jenny, they also died." Jenny prayed, "God, forgive me for what I've done I only wanted to have just one night of fun." "Tell those people's family, I've made their lives dim, And wish I could return their families to them." "Tell Mom and Dad I'm sorry I lied, And that it's my fault so many have died. Oh, nurse, won't you please tell them that for me?" The nurse just stood there-she never agreed. But took Jenny's hand with tears in her eyes. And a few moments later Jenny died. A man asked the nurse, "Why didn't you do your best To bid that girl her one last request?" She looked at the man with eyes so sad. "Because the people in the other car were her mom and dad." <{POST_SNAPBACK}> I was completely fine until that very last line.OMG that is such an emotional story.Don't get me wrong I think this story is wonderful but that story is just like something that happened to me well I was a bystander. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Biggest Fan Of Fuzzy Posted November 28, 2004 Report Share Posted November 28, 2004 (edited) Tisk, Tisk Taynio.... Edited November 29, 2004 by Horatio Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mega Wolf Posted December 2, 2004 Report Share Posted December 2, 2004 Tisk, Tisk Taynio.... <{POST_SNAPBACK}> Um....... what are you implying? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Biggest Fan Of Fuzzy Posted December 6, 2004 Report Share Posted December 6, 2004 Um....... what are you implying? <{POST_SNAPBACK}> He didnt write that..It was on a website.. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mega Wolf Posted December 6, 2004 Report Share Posted December 6, 2004 He didnt write that..It was on a website.. <{POST_SNAPBACK}> Oh..ok.. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Taynio Posted December 6, 2004 Author Report Share Posted December 6, 2004 He didnt write that..It was on a website.. <{POST_SNAPBACK}> who is to say that I still didn't write it? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Horatio Posted December 6, 2004 Report Share Posted December 6, 2004 who is to say that I still didn't write it? That is a very good point. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
moosey368 Posted December 6, 2004 Report Share Posted December 6, 2004 its soooo long i didnt read it *NOW THIS POST IS IN LIE VISION* very good story i read every word 5-6 times!!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mega Wolf Posted December 7, 2004 Report Share Posted December 7, 2004 That is a very good point. <{POST_SNAPBACK}> Yes, what if it was his website? Or someone who goes here and forgot to mention it was Taynio's? Or if it was published onto another website? Yeah, theres a lot more different reasons it could still be his work. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Biggest Fan Of Fuzzy Posted December 8, 2004 Report Share Posted December 8, 2004 (edited) who is to say that I still didn't write it? <{POST_SNAPBACK}> Another website it was on. Edited December 8, 2004 by Horatio Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Horatio Posted December 8, 2004 Report Share Posted December 8, 2004 Something to think about... perhaps Taynio wrote that on another website and posted it elsewhere or gave others permission to use it. There are lots of possibilities. I think that we should slow down a bit and consider these thoughts before we jump to negative conclusions. How does that sound? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Taynio Posted December 10, 2004 Author Report Share Posted December 10, 2004 Something to think about... perhaps Taynio wrote that on another website and posted it elsewhere or gave others permission to use it. There are lots of possibilities. I think that we should slow down a bit and consider these thoughts before we jump to negative conclusions. How does that sound? <{POST_SNAPBACK}> That sounds correct. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Ug~ Posted June 20, 2007 Report Share Posted June 20, 2007 I knew I forgot something! I forgot to say I didn't write it lol Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Horatio Posted June 20, 2007 Report Share Posted June 20, 2007 I knew I forgot something! I forgot to say I didn't write it lol Who didn't write it... Ug or Taynio? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tayni0 Posted June 22, 2007 Report Share Posted June 22, 2007 I knew I forgot something! I forgot to say I didn't write it lol Who didn't write it... Ug or Taynio? Neither Taynio nor Ug wrote it lol. Found it on a website and it was just too sad to pass up spreading it to you all. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Horatio Posted June 22, 2007 Report Share Posted June 22, 2007 I knew I forgot something! I forgot to say I didn't write it lol Who didn't write it... Ug or Taynio? Neither Taynio nor Ug wrote it lol. Found it on a website and it was just too sad to pass up spreading it to you all. Thanks. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tayni0 Posted June 29, 2007 Report Share Posted June 29, 2007 its soooo long i didnt read it *NOW THIS POST IS IN LIE VISION* very good story i read every word 5-6 times!!! Jenny Jenny Jenny Jenny Jenny was was was was was so so so so so happy happy happy happy happy about about about about about the the the the the house house house house house they they they they they had had had had had found found found found found. Â Â LIKE THAT, HUH, MOOSEY??? ROFLMBOLACS (roll on floor laughing out loud and cannot stop) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Glowurm Posted June 29, 2007 Report Share Posted June 29, 2007 At first I felt sort of like it was a story made so that people wouldn't drink/drive. Â But then it turned out to be a sad story. Â I smiled at the end... Â Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mushroom_king Posted June 29, 2007 Report Share Posted June 29, 2007 its soooo long i didnt read it *NOW THIS POST IS IN LIE VISION* very good story i read every word 5-6 times!!! Jenny Jenny Jenny Jenny Jenny was was was was was so so so so so happy happy happy happy happy about about about about about the the the the the house house house house house they they they they they had had had had had found found found found found. Â Â LIKE THAT, HUH, MOOSEY??? ROFLMBOLACS (roll on floor laughing out loud and cannot stop) o___________________________________________o... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cheesus Posted June 30, 2007 Report Share Posted June 30, 2007 I'm pretty sure it was made up. While possible, it is unlikely. And sounds like the kind of sob story that someone would create just to scare people away from drinking and driving. yes, I do agree with the message. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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